Updated: Jan 12
by Talia Taleh
Tropes: Less innocent than she looks, happy for now
Kinks: Exhibitionism, public sex
Picnic With Patience is a short, quick, and hot little story about a first date. Patience invites her coworker, Jamie, for a picnic in the park. It's almost sweet how pure that seems. "Seems" being the operative word, though.
I'm a sucker for the slight mind fuck that comes with realizing a woman is a lot less innocent than she looks. A mildly successful execution of this will score points with me. And even though the veil drops early in the story after an unintentional spicy photo is shared, Taleh pulled this trope off well. (Here would be an excellent opportunity to say "like her dress," but that stays on the whole story ... technically.) From the protagonist's reactions, it's easy to tell Patience has been a lot more adventurous than she looks.
Public sex is a great fantasy. (Carrying it out in the real world comes with a bunch of implications I'm digging into for an upcoming article on my Patreon.) The danger of getting caught is an aphrodisiac for some. And this isn't just a rendezvous in the bushes. This is managing to have sex in the middle of a busy park and not getting caught.
How is that possible? The pair relies on people just going about their day, phone in hand. I was waiting for it to turn into a retread of the "look up from your phone" conversation that annoys me. (For a lot of us, we're more connected with people because we have our smartphones.) It was nice that this story isn't judging people for being connected, just using the distraction to the couple's advantage.
As they are enjoying each other's company in public, there's a nice little bit of body positivity thrown in there that I really enjoyed.
It got a little lost in some logistics. I wasn't exactly sure how they pulled off certain maneuvers despite the level of description, but maybe I wasn't thinking straight at that point in the story.
The end of the tale is a pleasant happy for now with plenty of open-ended implications of where this story could go. I would gladly read more about Patience, as well as Jamie if he decided to tag along.
There is a prequel of sorts involving another gentleman. I have yet to read it, but it is on my TBR pile.
If you'd like to read Picnic With Patience you can find it here.